For my revision essay I am revising one of my power writing essays "On Being a Marching Trumpet" In this I talked mainly about how awesome it is to play the trumpet and how all the other instruments suck. It was fun to write and at first I wasn't really sure how I was going to revise it. I started by writing a bunch of junk, yes 98% of it was the most random junk about band and music, and stuff like the answer to life the universe and everything. Fortunately in that 2% I came up with something that I could expand into a full argument.
My goal in the revision essay was to show that even in though our marching band is not the best, I are still proud of being in the group. The students at our school do not give much thought to the marching band. Very few, if any of them actually watch our halftime shows.
In my essay I took the perspectives of different groups of people regarding the band. Throughout the whole thing I included the fact that we are not very good but still enjoy ourselves and are proud to be in the band
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